Sunday, 23 November 2014

WINOL Sportsweek 19th November 2014 - Feedback

Hi everybody, apologies for the late blog post, I've had a crazy few days at work and just haven't had the time to get round to writing this. This blog is actually being written at 4am Doha time which is 1am UK time and it comes after a 12 hour Premier League shift so count yourselves lucky!

PRESENTING - Rhodri Cannon
  • Rhodri - well done. I know you are very limited, much like all of you, in presenting in a studio or even being on camera, but you've done well. 
  • Try and really punch those headlines. I want you to sell them to me. Don't be afraid to really give it some oomph! You just seemed a bit timid. 
  • No more 'coming up on today's show' or 'goodbye' - it's quite a weak way to introduce your show and quite a lazy way to end it. It's just a kop out for me. As a team, it may be worth you all sitting down and thinking about new ways to open and close the show. 
  • Speak to Angus, or even Aarran for that matter. If presenting is something you want to move into, the best people to talk to are people who present in front of millions. Both Angus and Aarran do.
  • Guys....massive, massive mistake. Eastleigh had to be your main headline. It just had to be. It's your top story, but it doesn't justify a headline? Makes no sense to me. If you think everything need a headline then have 4 headlines. Do not restrict yourselves to 3. Big error here.
  • Bristow in the headlines - yes, I'm all for that....I would have ended it when he said "abysmal" though - just think he spoke for a bit too long in that headline.
  • 'Rachel Gunter investigates growth in women's football' - that's really weak. First of all, I wouldn't have mentioned Rachel's name....I would have said "WINOL investigates blah blah blah" - but, "growth" - what is growth? What do we mean by growth? 
  • Ross - really well done. You've done extremely well here. It was so important that you as a sports team got this story in. Ross, I could tell by your twitter that you've had a manic week, but you've worked so hard on this, so give yourself a pat on the back. 
  • Few things to comment on....First, I would have put a slow zoom on the still images. Just keeps the VT moving and flowing a bit more.
  • Nice to hear from Richard Hill. You needed him. 
  • Also nice to get some sort of reaction from Lincoln. You needed to. They travelled so far for nothing in the end. 
  • One thing though....I don't like the black behind the tweets and the club statement. Could you have filmed a wide shot of Eastleigh's ground or an area of the pitch to use of a background. Spoiled the piece just a bit. Looked a bit amateurish.
  • Very good outro. Confident, informative. A nice piece all round. The points above for future reference. Really well done Ross.
  • Nice idea with the link to the VT, but Rhodri, a little more conviction in your voice next time. "I THOUGHT WE WERE ABYSMAL" - really go for that line. It's a great line from the manager. Really slamming his players. Sell it.
  • Elliot - it's shot too wide for my liking. I know there is always a fear of missing something and as your camera skills get better, you will be more confident in yourself, but try and get tighter on the game. 
  • Also, the had already mentioned his name previous to the goal.....don't need to say his name again in full. Just say 'Smith' or make a reference to 'making amends for his earlier guilt edge chance' - something like that.
  • The whole VT is too descriptive for me. There are elements of variety in your scripting but for me it's too much of 'he did this, he did that, this was saved, etc etc' - don't tell me what I'm seeing. Use your scripting to enhance what I'm seeing.
  • I don't think you need to SOQ this. You sign out, and then we hear from Bristow. Just go straight to Bristow. If we don't hear you give an SOQ, then you don't give an SOQ. Not the end of the world. Just disrupts the flow. 
  • Not a bad piece Elliot, but lots to be improved upon. Scripting is key component of any VT, so just work harder at that for next time.
FA Cup Graphic
  • You need to write on the Graphic what that game is. I know what it is, but not everybody will do.
  • FA CUP 1ST ROUND REPLAY, TUESDAY 18TH NOVEMBER 2014, AFC TELFORD 2-1 BASINGTOKE - These should all be written on the graphic.
  • I think you need to give us some detail about the game as well. I like that you've written the scorers on the Full Frame Graphic but there's no harm in talking about it. I know for a fact that Telford had a man sent off, so it's even more of a kick in the teeth for Basingstoke isn't it?
  • Afzul....natural sound under the Full Frame Sting at the top of your edit? Where is it? I mentioned this a couple of weeks ago. It's a horrible, awkward moment of silence. Get the atmos up!
  • When I first watched this I genuinely had no idea what was going on. 'Went 1-0 up' *GOAL* then graphic saying 2-0. It's only when I listened to the voiceover again that I realised you had actually missed the first goal. Why was that? It was 21 minutes into the game. Hopefully there was some sort of explanation as to why it wasn't in your edit. 
  • If you do miss a goal guys, then maybe work a line into your VT to compensate for missing it. Maybe something like "Poole went ahead through Person A, but his excellent strike was far too good for our WINOL Cameras" - you have to acknowledge the fact you missed it. You cannot just ignore it. But, please, please do not miss ANY goals or major incidents in games. Afzul, let me know why you missed it please. Technical problem? Arrived late? Let me know.
  • Your audio cuts from the 3-0 goal to different audio for the celeb and replay. Just use all the sound from the Main Camera and carry it underneath ALL your shots as part of this sequence.
  • Same again for 4-0. Audio cuts are too harsh. Carry them underneath all parts of the sequence. 
  • Nice replay though for the 4th goal - it actually shows the horrible blunder by the keeper quite well. Good use of the replay.
  • Try not to be too descriptive in your VT Afzul. You started really well scripting wise but as the VT went on I just felt it becoming more and more of you telling me what I was seeing. Work around it, think of new ways to introduce different stages of the game. How can they link? In fact, I'm pretty sure in your VT Joe Maxwell hit the bar and then set up the goal in your next shot! That's a perfect way to link it - "Maxwell may not have found the net, but he was involved in what turned out to be a small consolation for Totton. Person B blah blah blah" Get it?
  • Team....There is a huge, huge error here. I sent that tweet to you as I thought it would be a nice way to use a local footballer on the international stage, but NOBODY has checked when this tweet was. I knew when it was. He tweeted on Tuesday night. What happened on Tuesday night? Scotland 1-3 England. He was tweeting about THAT game, NOT the Slovenia game as you guys scripted. That's a massive error guys. You need to check and double check it. Really poor. And such a shame.
  • The pictures are good though. Well done for mentioning Lambert and Lallana, although I don't think you said they were former Saints players. I think you said they played for Saints. I may be wrong, but just check that. Both are at Liverpool now remember. 
  • Next time, slow zoom on the pictures. Too still for me....yes, irony there I know, but even so, keep it moving and flowing.
  • Big error here though guys. Please don't think I'm criticising, but if I did what you did at my work, I'd be getting a rollicking. We all make mistakes, but you all must have seen Sportsweek before broadcast and upload. Drew, this does fall on your head though. You are in charge of the programme. You should have noticed this. Rhodri to some extent you too. You're the presenter, you wrote/read the script. It had to be flagged.
  • The link to this VT and the first line in this VT are EXACTLY the same. Communication guys. You all work together - this should have been noticed.
  • This is a really nice piece Rachel. Well done. It's carefully constructed and like your previous sports package, it's very interesting. Try not to limit yourself though. It's great you are getting the female aspect of the game in, but let's try and get some variety in your stories.
  • Really nice that you interview the women's captain. I can hear the audio cuts though. Are there any fades in and out of new quotes? They seem a bit harsh. Remember, you can cover any cuts with raised audio levels of the girls kicking a ball so we don't hear the harsh cuts. 
  • Also, I know it's tricky with a piece like this, but I think there's too many of the same shot. Too many shots from a distance of the girls running and playing football. A bit samey at stages in this VT.
  • I don't know if WINOL has a set way for your SOQs but I hate "Person C, Winchester News Online, Winchester" - Just end it on "Winchester News Online" if you are in Winchester, but say the place name for anywhere else.
  • Nice work though Rachel. It's a good way to end the show. 
  • Program started very strongly - Ross' VT was the stand out. That was real sports news. Excellent job. 
  • Ended very nicely too - Rachel's women in football piece was a nice way to end. 
  • The middle of the show was a mixture of good, scrappy and poor. A blend of all three. But, there are some big mistakes in here guys, editorial and technical.
  • The show has really come on so well in the last few weeks and you've all come on so well, but I think we took a step back this week. I don't like saying it but I always have been honest and I always will be. Ask Chris and Brian!
  • Don't think of this week as a poor show - think of it as a learning curve. Why were some parts bad? Where can they be improved? What do WE, as a team, need to do to ensure there are no mistakes. Maybe something for you all to sit down and chat about this week coming.
  • One good thing though - it's a longer show! Which is excellent - and I know you are all busting a gut to get it longer and better so well done everybody on that side of it. 
  • Also, one more's all football again. I know Angus made a point about this a week or two ago and I definitely agree. We need more than just football. We need to try and get other stuff in there too. Rugby's popular locally. Just a thought.
  • Keep working hard though. And as always....any questions, please do get in touch! 

Friday, 14 November 2014

WINOL Sportsweek 12th November 2014 - Feedback

  • First thing's first Marc, I noticed your top button (or lack of). Make sure your appearance is smart! Remember, people want to see you and the programme in all its glory so make sure you are dressed to impress.
  • I like your tone - it's a good tone, high energy. I think at times you try to read too quick, and then you stumble on a couple of occasions - make sure you let it breathe. It's not a race. It's a story, and I want you to tell me the story clearly and effectively. Balancing the tone of how you say your links, and the pace of it is crucial. 
  • I'm banning "Coming up on today's show" - let's see a variation in scripting. I change my INTRO for beIN Sports nearly every other day. I'm also banning "goodbye" on the OUTRO. No more "Goodbye" - it's such a lame ending. Let's think of new ways to sign out from the programme. 
  • Headlines are good, I think we need to put more in there, and maybe change the way we do the headlines. I think after the TITLES....Headline 1....Intro....Headline 2, Headline 3, Headline 4, etc etc. It just flows much more nicely. There's no stopping and starting again. Keep the pace flowing.
  • Do not be afraid to put more than 2/3 headlines. You had 4 stories this week....why not headline them all?
  • Again, this is a very good highlights package Rhodri. You really are slowly mastering the art of football highlights VTs.
  • I see you've carried the audio underneath celebs and replays this week - well done for taking that on board. See how much of an improvement it makes!
  • Try not to be too descriptive with your VO. I felt as the package went on, you were becoming more and more descriptive about what we were seeing. However, your scripting is getting better week by week which is great to see.
  • Also great to see, is a post match interview - FINALLY! Well done getting Jason - he's always keen to talk - he's a great guy. Shame about the lights turning on midway through but unfortunately there's not a huge amount you can do about that - sod's law!
  • One thing I did notice....keep your graphics consistent....the full time score graphic said "Basingstoke" then the graphic for Bristow said "Basingstoke Town manager" - pick one or the other. I would go Basingstoke Town so just make sure it has it on both graphics.
  • Well done Rhodri - great work. Let's think of new ways to keep getting better and perhaps new ideas at how we can introduce and end your VTs. 
  • The dates are wrong on both graphics. Both games are being played on Sunday 7th December 2014. I know the FA Cup schedule has been affected and changed this week due to certain unforeseen circumstances, so maybe you published that before the change. We need to update that to accommodate the new dates. 
  • Again, something I noticed here which may have slipped through the net your side but can I ask why Eastleigh has an 'FC' on the end and the other clubs don't? This comes down to consistency again - I wouldn't put FC. We know they are a football club. Would you put Chelsea FC or Arsenal FC? 
  • In terms of the script for's good. Well done, however "Basingstoke Town face a trip to League One leaders Bristol City" - Remember they have to BEAT Telford in the replay so you need to reference that. 
  • Also, I know for a fact Angus will like this seeing as he is a die-hard Bristol City fan - so any extra publicity his side gets is great for his 'minnows' ***office joke***
  • You have no idea how happy I am to see this in here this week. Drew, I know we discussed this and well done for getting it done. This is SPORTS NEWS, and it is localised because of the mention he used to play for AFC Totton. 
  • You covered all aspects of the story you needed to cover. How he did the injury....the latest updates....what injury it was. It was good. 
  • The tweets are great - see how simple a sports tory can be made from just using social media? Don't worry about pictures if you don't have them....always be thinking about ways to use a story with new ideas.
  • I don't think you need 'ARCHIVE FOOTAGE' in the bottom left of the Charles OOV. It's WINOL Footage! Here's an important point though - do you see how vital archive footage is - just look at what he can be used for! It's important we keep a register of what is kept on tapes and what is uploaded where for any future use on Sportsweek.
  • I actually spoke to Michael - he's seen the show - he's very grateful for you putting this in - he's absolutely devastated about the injury and from what he's told me he could be out for a long, long time. It may be worth contacting him in the coming weeks - this should be a running story updating on his progress. He has seen the surgeon so it's only a matter of time before he gets a length of time he's out for. Maybe we can set up an exclusive interview when he's on the mend? Get in touch with him - he's a nice guy. 
  • NOTE - The audio mix at the end of the Charles OOV back into the studio was very, very harsh. Let's make sure all mixes are good in post production. Sounded horrible.
  • Nice Ross, well done for organising this. Finally good to hear from the new man at the helm at Winchester.
  • I don't think this needed your voice at the top. I think we could have just linked straight to the interview using Marc. You didn't show us anything that we needed to see - so maybe next time guys just a straight link from presenter to interview will suffice.
  • You should have put a couple of paints in there to cover up your questions. I like the 3 camera shots but as much as I like you, I don't want to see you. Cover them with Winchester footage. 
  • I think if this is something we intend to do regularly we should film every manager at every ground at every game we go to. We need GVs of these managers. Maybe even if you get a 2nd camera at games to film them for 1-2 minutes. It's a really nice OOV to have on standby. Drew - maybe this is something you can do? Upload them to youtube then that way you do not have to re-capture old archive tapes - you already have the manager OOVs there and then for you. Let's do the same for players too. Let's try and get as many generic shots of players as possible! Let's comp them together - they will be so useful for future programming and it means should a story come up about that player then you have it ready to go!
  • Amy, I really like these pieces you do. I think they're great. 
  • Your sequences are very well thought out - they're interesting and you have a wide variety of pictures at your disposal. 
  • I thought your VO was very disjointed. Not your scripting, your scripting was fine. Your actual delivery of that script seemed very hesitant and out of tune. If it doesn't sound great, do it again. We want your VT to flow and compensate the shots and the hard work that's gone into the package. I just felt that your VO actually let down what should have been yet another excellent local story which was perfect for your target audience. Local people and students.
  • A few black holes in the programme this week. I think there was one in the headlines and another after the FA Cup graphic. We don't like black holes - make sure to double check the programme before your export and upload!
  • Editorially very good this week. Highlights, news stories, exclusive interviews, features. Solid work across the board. 
  • Duration not great again.....imagine if we didn;t have Bristow post match and the Charles story! Would have been much shorter! Always scour the net for news and reactions. POST MATCH INTERVIEWS FROM EVERY GAME THIS WEEKEND PLEASE.
  • I honestly believe we need a comp of individual manager and player OOVS. This will take time but let's make a start on them. They will be so important.
  • I've decided I do not like the credits at the end. NO CREDITS. Let's put the full version of the titles at the start and finish to open and close your programme.
  • I want you all to try and look forward in your packages too. Remember, your programme is uploaded on a Wednesday, meaning most of the games are out of date. How can we push it so we are looking forward rather than looking back?
  • I think we need to as-live stand ups outside St Marys. This needs to be a best, most confident reporter. It doesn't need to be an essay. It doesn't require any paints. It just needs a reporter outside St Marys stadium looking ahead to what Southampton are doing this weekend. They are 2nd in the EPL, and the ONLY Hampshire side in the top flight. 1 minute to 1 minute 30 tops. This week is the perfect week to do it. Do it on Monday or Tuesday - look forward to Saints game at the weekend - but please feel free to reflect on the players who were on international duty. Use the fact your have an EPL side on your doorstep more. 
  • I always think, reluctantly, you need some more sports in there. Local rugby? Basingstoke Bison Ice Hockey? I don't want it to become WINOL Footballweek.....remember, SPORTSWEEK. Let's try and push for this. If it means that some reporters have to do two packages in a week then so be it. 
  • We are really getting there, we really are. You are all taking the points on board and working extremely hard at improving your all round journalistic skills. Keep working hard. Keep communicating with one another and helping each other to create better programming.

Wednesday, 5 November 2014

WINOL Sportsweek 5th November 2014 - Feedback

First of all, I'd like to apologise for my lack of feedback the past two weeks - I was on annual leave and spending time with my fiance and son, I didn't really have too much time to write any blogs up for you however I did see both Sportsweek programmes you did so if there is anything individual you wish to speak to me about then please do not hesitate to get in touch.

PRESENTING - Afzul Sumra
  • I like your voice Afzul. It's calm and quite soft - you sound relaxed when reading. Now it's all about working on delivering your links. Remember, there's a difference between 'reading' and 'delivering' - anybody can read words on an autocue but it takes a certain confidence and talent to really deliver it in the right way.
  • Similar point, but I don't think your tone is right for many of the stories. I can see you are trying hard to get the tone, but I don't think it's right. I think you pause at the wrong places when linking and it automatically destroys the flow. I imagine this is your first time, so practice makes perfect!
  • I don't know what you are doing with your arms....maybe it's a way you are on camera but it needs to stop. If you make arm movements to demonstrate a point then fair enough but it's like you were on loop - just be wary of that next time.
  • Really sell the headlines - these set the platform for the rest of the show - I wasn't too convinced - really engage my attention immediately by teasing what is coming up on the show. 
  • One more thing - make sure you pronounce your T's. There were a couple of "Ce-ee"'s in there. "CITY" - correct pronunciation is everything when presenting.
  • I've never been overly keen on showing goals in the headlines. To me, I've seen a goal from that game....the best goal....why should I wait and watch more?
  • "And Ross Perkins tries out walking football?" - What? I am immediately bored. That does not interest me at all - so what is your job - to make it interesting for me AS A VIEWER. Scripting headlines needs work for a feature like that.
  • "Before the game started" - surely there's a better way of introducing your VT? - What about "A day of celebration for both Basingstoke manager Jason Bristow and club striker Chris Flood - xx wins in October coupled with xx goals for Flood saw both men pick up the manager and player of the month respectively"?
  • You didn't actually tell us why they won the awards - you just said helping towards an impressive start to the season - give us the stats. How many did Bristow win as manager in the month? Must be good to win an award! Flood is top scorer, yep, great, I have no idea how many goals he have to tell the viewer.
  • What is wrong with the sound? It's like it has an audio filter on it or it's distorted. Is there a technical reason for that? 
  • With the penalty - you don't need to show Sawyer putting the ball on the spot. We all know what a penalty and the spot is - no need for that. 
  • Nice stat about Basingstoke conceding more than 1 at home though - big fan of stats like that - good work.
  • Nice little way to end the piece - well scripted too.
  • One thing I noticed generally across your VT Elliot.....when you show a goal and then cut to the celeb and/or replay.....carry the sound from the main camera underneath the celeb and/or replay. It just flows better because you could have fans cheering for a goal and then utter silence on a replay - with this way the cheers continues and there's a bit more atmos for the entirety of the time we see everything surrounded with the goal. 
  • There's a much better improvement from your early VTs here Rhodri - you are really taking the tips and advice I'm giving you on board which is nice to see.
  • Just be careful not to be too descriptive within your package. I felt that at times you were telling us what we were seeing - working around that is an art and something that will come in time. 
  • Also, same as I said to Elliot, carry the sound under your celebs and replays. Disrupted the flow.
  • Not a huge amount to say about this. Good job - now just really work hard and really emphasising that voice and learning when to up your tone and lower your tone. Well done though - nice work.
  • First thing's first....the Graphic Sting at the top....why are they suddenly Winchester FC? Where's the City? If you were doing the same for Bristol City, would you just put Bristol? You need the CITY in there, if not then you do not need the FC.
  • "Winchester star'ed well" - where's your T? PRONUNCIATION IS KEY
  • This whole VT is very, very descriptive. Why are you telling me what I am seeing? Don't do that - I want you to tell me things I don't know - I can see the game, I don't need you to tell me EXACTLY what is happening unless it is an incident that possibly needs clarifying.
  • "Making the" - BIG NO for me. Massive NO in fact. There are so many other ways to say a team went 1-0 up..."took the lead", "opened the scoring", "broke the deadlock" - it just seems too simple for me - think outside the box with your scripting. It's a crucial factor in TV and if that's weak, then your VT will be weak. 
  • The tackle by Dominic Cope....what are you showing me there? It's a nothing challenge. I'm a Level 7 qualified referee and I wouldn't have even given him a yellow for that. Maybe a free kick, but that's not a talking point at all. Poor editorial decision Marc. 
  • The Mason 'elbow' - NOW THAT IS A TALKING POINT! - I genuinely believe it is an elbow so well done for putting it in, but I have a question for a 50/50 challenge more deserving of a replay than an 'elbow' which is violent conduct"? Cope's challenge has a replay, Mason's 'elbow' doesn't - again editorially - the wrong decision. "The ref took no action" - THEN SHOW US A REPLAY! A major talking point.
  • "The ref finally took action" - okay, when I first saw this, I thought there was going to be a red card, which would in turn justify your decision slightly to put in the other incidents, but it wasn't. It was just a YELLOW. Not worthy of being in your VT. The only one I would have shown and put a replay on was Chris Mason.
  • Not your best piece this week Marc - hopefully these points will help you. One thing you did well though - you carried your audio underneath celebs and replays! Well done - Rhodri and Elliot - this is what I was explaining to you - speak to Marc about this.
  • Ross, I think you have scripted this absolutely on the nose. It's explanatory, it's interesting and I really enjoyed listening to what you had to tell me about Walking Football and the initiatives in place by the Hampshire FA. It's a nice local story about a worldwide sport and the unique feel that is being put on it. Your scripting was crucial in this and you delivered it moreorless perfectly.
  • A couple of technical pointers - I think the use of the GoPro was excellent, maybe just a little bit too much of it. 
  • Don't think you used the camera enough, few more ground shots would have been nice, maybe put the camera inside or just behind the net? Although it is difficult when there's not much going on in such a small space.
  • The first man and then the woman you interviewed.....a little bit lazy with the camera work I think. It's nice to have both of them in vision to create more of a 'conversation feel' but it's in the same spot, and I wpuld have maybe done individual positions for all 3 interviewees.
  • Nice work though Ross. You took a national sport and localised it and that is a key thing that WINOL needs regularly on News and Sport.
  • Drew - the links to the VTs were much, much better this week. I am off work on Tuesday so will be free the majority of the day so I am volunteering my services to go through the running order with you and help you to polish up those scripts a bit more. Please email or tweet me if you want some help with that this coming week.
  • We are getting closer and closer to that 10 minute mark - that has to be a minimum for me. We are getting there, and we still need to think of new ways to get it up to 10.....something I manager/player reaction post-match interviews? That may have stretched the 10 minute mark! I will continue to bang on about this but it is so vital we get them - it really does give us something else to play with when you are constructing your running order. I want to hear from the people involved.
  • Think we needed to hear from Bristow and Flood - manager and player of the month - what a great month for the club on the pitch.....why have we not heard from them? I used to interview player and managers at nearly EVER match - we should continue to do the same now.
  • Have you ever considered using player tweets? Sometimes they are quite nice. I follow Chris Flood and Jason Bristow just out of my own amusement. I know for a fact that Flood tweeted about his Player of the Month award and he got a lot of support from teammates and fans. We use them on our beIN Sports news bulletins and it's a great way to actually show the players that their efforts are being shown on a local sports programme. "Well let's take a look at some of the tweets from the players involved in the weekend's games....Basingstoke's top scorer Chris Flood was full of joy despite his side losing to Chelmsford. The xx-year-old celebrated picking up the player of the month award etc etc etc"
  • Keep an eye out for any famous names in the area over the coming weeks. There is always a lot going on in Winchester and a lot of names make their way to the region - a perfect interview opportunity to talk about a variety of topics. At WINOL, I interviewed Matt Le Tissier, Paul Walsh, Darren Anderton, Charlotte Edwards, Greg Draper, Guy Butters and Henry Olonga plus more. So keep an eye out - these will be exclusive to WINOL and if subjects like these talk to YOU about current affairs and topics in the world of sport, then the world is your oyster and will enhance programming an incredible amount. 
Well done everybody. Improving every week, and starting to become more a programme feel about it instead of a load of VT's hacked together on a timeline. 
As always, feel free to email me or tweet me @G_Messenger if you have any questions.